How would you describe the place shown in this picture in 3 or 4 sentences? Remember to use sentence punctuation and some interesting and original adjectives. Click the 'comments' link to answer and remember to use a nickname!
As still as a stone gargoyle the stagnant water sat waiting. The mountainous shadows casting a shadow over the slow stirrings just below the surface. Something's breath hung silently in the air , in this supposedly deserted space!
This paragraph is awesome! Class Locke like the simile 'as still as a stone gargoyle' and the adjective stagnant that is used to describe the water. It puts a horrible, creepy and smelly image into our heads.
Thanks for the prompt response! Glad you liked the description. Hopefully some of Class Locke will write some of their own awesome comments over the Summer!
The still,raw,icy lake has spots with heavy snow.The clouds,white and fluffy,move slowly like a big cat searching cautiously for its prey.Snowy mountains are still and are waiting to be climbed.
This is a fantastic description! I love your simile about the big cat cautiously searching for its prey. Thanks for having a go. We're looking forward to hearing your other ideas.
Well for me it's hard to describe it but I can make it into a small story! - - - - - - - - -- - - - - - - - -- - - - - - - - -- - - - - - - - -- - - - - - - - -- - - - - - - - -- - - - - - As the wind howls throughout the mountains, the keen air makes the trees FALL! Whoooooosh, whooooooooooooooooooosh! The snow covers your face! Whilst a large Polar Bear is coming closer to your sight!...You run and you run, but there's nowhere to hide! It's coming closer,closer,closer... You open your eyes slowly as you see the snow flying across your face!... It's a dark night but in your sight, you see something...It looks like a wolf, you run to the strange thing. When you get to it, it starts to disappear... You hear some screaming, on your right there's a house, a very huge house...You run towards it, when you get inside the door SMASHES behind you! BANG, CRAAAAAEK!... You see a note in front of you on a locker. You pick up the note whilst you're terrified, it says. "All members of "Khillstezs" are immediately evacuated from Antarctica due to personal reasons. All members of staff will be found in Roth-"...You say "looks like the note wasn't finished, oh well..." --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- So yeah that's for chapter 1...I'm not sure to continue.
A terrifying opening to a story. You've really built up the suspense of being chased by a polar bear! I love your use of onomatopoeia, it makes it easy to imagine the noises in this extreme environment. Well done!
As still as a stone gargoyle the stagnant water sat waiting. The mountainous shadows casting a shadow over the slow stirrings just below the surface. Something's breath hung silently in the air , in this supposedly deserted space!
ReplyDeleteThis paragraph is awesome! Class Locke like the simile 'as still as a stone gargoyle' and the adjective stagnant that is used to describe the water. It puts a horrible, creepy and smelly image into our heads.
DeleteAmazing! I like "The mountainous shadows casting a shadow over the slow stirrings just below the surface", good job! Keep up the good work!
DeleteThanks for the prompt response! Glad you liked the description. Hopefully some of Class Locke will write some of their own awesome comments over the Summer!
ReplyDeleteThe still,raw,icy lake has spots with heavy snow.The clouds,white and fluffy,move slowly like a big cat searching cautiously for its prey.Snowy mountains are still and are waiting to be climbed.
ReplyDeleteThis is a fantastic description! I love your simile about the big cat cautiously searching for its prey. Thanks for having a go. We're looking forward to hearing your other ideas.
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ReplyDeletei think that everything has started to turn to ice and when every night comes strange things happen to this place
Thanks for having a go! I like the way you used the adjective strange but you need to remember sentence punctuation.
ReplyDeleteIt is freezing.
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Mysterious clouds float like ghosts around the mountain tops. Shimmering sunbeams make the ice glitter and sparkle.
ReplyDelete- Miss Hurley's Class
Fantastic adjectives guys...
DeleteA lovely clear sentence Miss Ellis' class. Well done! Can you write a sentence from home?
ReplyDeleteStormy seas, bumpy mountains, fluffy, grey clouds.
ReplyDeleteWell for me it's hard to describe it but I can make it into a small story!
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As the wind howls throughout the mountains, the keen air makes the trees FALL! Whoooooosh, whooooooooooooooooooosh! The snow covers your face! Whilst a large Polar Bear is coming closer to your sight!...You run and you run, but there's nowhere to hide! It's coming closer,closer,closer...
You open your eyes slowly as you see the snow flying across your face!... It's a dark night but in your sight, you see something...It looks like a wolf, you run to the strange thing. When you get to it, it starts to disappear... You hear some screaming, on your right there's a house, a very huge house...You run towards it, when you get inside the door SMASHES behind you! BANG, CRAAAAAEK!... You see a note in front of you on a locker. You pick up the note whilst you're terrified, it says. "All members of "Khillstezs" are immediately evacuated from Antarctica due to personal reasons. All members of staff will be found in Roth-"...You say "looks like the note wasn't finished, oh well..."
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So yeah that's for chapter 1...I'm not sure to continue.
A terrifying opening to a story. You've really built up the suspense of being chased by a polar bear! I love your use of onomatopoeia, it makes it easy to imagine the noises in this extreme environment. Well done!
DeleteThank you for writing my story again, thanks! :-D
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You're very welcome Faddyapple!
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